EXT. WHARF/SOUTH ISLAND LAKE - DAY
At a remote, picturesque lake, amidst towering mountains, an OLD MAN stands alone on a wharf eating an ICE-CREAM.
Dressed for the season in a pair of shorts and jandals, the dishevelled OLD BLOKE seems oblivious to his spectacular surroundings.
As he gazes down at the crystal-clear water below, a barefoot, MAORI KID hurtles up behind him on a B.M.X BIKE. Locking up the brakes, THE KID skids his bike to a stop next to the OLD BLOKE, nearly giving him a coronary.
BAREFOOT KID
(gesturing to the ‘Mr. Whippy’ ice-cream van parked at the end of the wharf)
Hey bro! Can you buy me a choc-top with sprinkles?
The OLD MAN clearly wants to be left alone.
OLD MAN
Nothing comes for free, mate.
BAREFOOT KID
(reluctantly agreeing)
Yeah, true. That’s what my Mum always says. You wanna do some bombs?
OLD MAN
Some what?
THE KID takes his singlet off, dumping it on the ground.
BAREFOOT KID
Some bombs, cuz!
Climbing onto the railing, THE KID strikes a heroic pose.
OLD MAN
Hey, be careful mate!
BAREFOOT KID
(hollering to the heavens)
Yeah-yaaaaaa!
Ignoring the OLD MAN’s concerns, THE KID leaps from the bridge, performing a picture-perfect, reverse-backward somersault to the water below!
BA-BOOM!!!
A spectacular plume of water shoots high into the air, causing the OLD MAN to drop his ice cream over the edge! Staring down at the rippling surface, the concerned OLD MAN waits for the boy to emerge, but after several moments, there is still no sign.
BAREFOOT KID (O.C.)
Your turn, bro!
The OLD MAN turns to see THE KID climbing up over the railing on the other side of the wharf.
OLD MAN
(sigh of relief)
Nah, I’m too old for that sort of thing, mate.
BAREFOOT KID
Not even, cuz! My Grandma’s heaps older than you, and she does bigger bombs than all of us!
OLD MAN
Really?
The OLD MAN looks a little depressed by the thought.
BAREFOOT KID
You alright, cuz?
OLD MAN
Yeah...
(staring up at the heavens)
Just got a few dramas back at home that’s all.
Tying his singlet around his head like a bandana, THE KID stares out across the epic vista, enjoying the warm sun on his face.
BAREFOOT KID
Mean day, aye bro?
For the first time the OLD MAN takes a good look at his stunning surroundings, allowing just a little bit of the sunshine and serenity in.
BAREFOOT KID
So, what’s your name anyway?
OLD MAN
I’m known by many names.
BAREFOOT KID
One’ll do.
OLD MAN
OK...
(cautious)
How does GOD sound?
THE KID looks at him as if he were a little crazy.
BAREFOOT KID
You’re GOD?
OLD MAN
Yep.
BAREFOOT KID
You can be whoever you wanna be I guess. That’s what my Dad always says.
OLD MAN
(a little pissed off)
What? Do you want me to prove it?
BAREFOOT KID
Yep.
Thinking THE KID is making fun of him, the OLD MAN begins to clamber up onto the railing.
OLD MAN
You wanna see a bomb? I’ll show you a bomb!
BAREFOOT KID
Bro, can you even swim?
OLD MAN
Of course I can swim! I invented swimming!
As the rickety OLD BLOKE stares down at the water below, he is suddenly overwhelmed by fear and vertigo! Losing balance, he falls forward off the wharf!
OLD MAN
(high-pitched squeal)
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
As he plummets downward, he suddenly performs a miraculous, one-of-a-kind, triple-twisting-flipping manoeuver, hitting the water on his backside in perfect bombing position!
KA-BOOOOOOM!!!!!!!
An almighty explosion of water erupts into the air causing the mountains to shake and the nearby wildlife to take to the heavens!
As the KID continues to watch on, totally stunned, the OLD MAN suddenly reappears, riding the giant plume of water back into the air! Popping over the railing, he lands effortlessly back on the wharf!
BAREFOOT KID
Farrrr! You ARE God!
OLD MAN
(a little surprised himself)
I told you.
BAREFOOT KID
What are you doing in New Zealand?
OLD MAN
I’m not sure really. I just felt like I needed to come back here... back to my EDEN.
BAREFOOT KID
(matter-of-factly)
We call it AOTEAROA around here bro, but sweetaz.
Overwhelmed with emotion, the OLD MAN’s eyes begin to fill with tears.
BAREFOOT KID
It’s good to come home now and then, aye bro? Eat some ice-creams, do some bombs...
(pause)
You’re never too old, bro. You’re never too old.
THE KID’s wise-words hit the OLD MAN, hard, like a punch in the guts.
OLD MAN
Who said that? Your Mum?
BAREFOOT KID
Nah! That was all me!
The OLD MAN laughs out loud. For the very first time he looks to have regained some inner strength and peace.
OLD MAN
(smiling)
Come on, cuz. Let’s get you that choc-top with sprinkles!
BAREFOOT KID
Chur!
As the warm, summer sun begins to set beyond the epic mountains, the excited KID rides after the OLD MAN, popping a wheelie as he goes.
FADE OUT.
BIOGRAPHY – Tim McLachlan (writer/director)
Tim began making films as a youngster in the mid-eighties which eventually led to a career in the New Zealand entertainment industry. After graduating with an Acting degree from the School of Performing and Screen Arts in 1998, Tim went on to work as an actor and stunt performer on such projects as ‘The Lord of the Rings Trilogy’, ‘X-Men 3’, ‘King Kong’, ‘The Water Horse’, ‘30 Days of Night’ and the upcoming ‘The Warrior’s Way’. As a writer and director of independent film and theatre projects, his credits include sell-out seasons of the acclaimed play, ‘Wedding Speeches’ (2002/2006), the award-winning short films, ‘Henrietta’ (2007) and ‘Cuz’ (2009), and the made-for-$7000 feature film, ‘Hidden’ (2005), which won awards for ‘Best Film’ and ‘Best Director’ at festivals in Hollywood, New York, and Toronto. Tim is currently developing his own feature film projects with the hope that one day his big break will come!
Jonathan Adams said...
Good Luck brother!!! hope it goes your way.
yobinim@hotmail.com
drop me a line.
Jonny
Mohammed Hassan said...
:) congrats :) enjoy and have fun fun fun..
br,
Mo
Gary Hughes said...
Man. so good. One of the other contestants was interested in our original NZ song
http://your-big-break.com/entry/13996
We are cutting in the studio next week
Cheers Bro
Steven Drage said...
Awesome Brother!Brilliant, nice work!!Its your time to Shine.All the best.
N Brooks said...
Brilliant - definitely a winner!
Frances Macaulay Forde said...
This script has such an emotional pull; the religious angle is the vehicle to reach many hearts around the world but doesn't dominate for me. I was standing there too in the first image emoting with a lump in my throat, was quickly charmed by the juxtaposition of youth and age building to sheer joy as the old man jumps - I wanted him to sooooooooo bad!
Your cleverly written relatable combination of sorrow and joy, has to be a winner wherever the audience lives in this world!
Well done.
David Vickers said...
just ignore "Barbara's" comment below, "she" is just jelous and saddened that "she" didnt have the right stuff to make it, or read the brief.
Tim Zafir said...
this is an awesome script Tim...the yanks will understand just fine, hope to see you doing the triple back pike. goodluck dude and go hard
Jack Thompson said...
Congrats Tim! Do it for the kiwis! Love your story! My entry had a spirited Maori boy in it too - so I'm especially looking forward to seeing your film! Well done bro! Jack Thompson (entry 10740).
Violeta Ivanova said...
If the film is supposed to play in the US, this will not work well. For one, I don't think the audience will get the slang. Also, I'd avoid any religious reference in general. Other than that, it's a fun script. Best of luck to you.
Barbara said...
I've heard it said that if you don't have anything nice to say, you shouldn't say anything at all. However, after looking at this #1 choice... I will look no further. It is blatantly sacrilegious... lacking humor... and although it might have mass appeal, it is without class. If this is used to promote New Zealand, it will have the opposite effect on the demographics who are most likely to have enough money to travel there.
Kent Briggs said...
SHOT bro - this is the one I voted for outa yer scripts too - must have good taste.
Go hard with the next phase Timoti!
Good Shit
Rajneel Singh said...
I just KNEW this was gonna be a finalist! Such a great script man! Love it!
Sarah McLachlan said...
YEEEEEHHHHHAAAARRR!! So stoked you guys were chosen! Cant wait to see it made. Congrats!! Love Sarah xx
Richard Becker said...
You guys/girl all rocked it, and i am totally happy your scripts were chosen, congrats;)
Carmen Hagen said...
Tim - LOVE, LOVE, LOVE everything about this! Going to start the viral mania by sharing this ...
Sarah McLachlan said...
Hey Tim - awesome, love them all & have voted for all of them too - I think the Wild Ones is the one I'd love to see on film but this one sounds great too! All the best - your sis:) xxxx
justin Carter said...
Choice!!!!!!!!!!! bombs bro??????????
Julia White said...
Ive voted for the last two, liked them better, have posted it on facebook too. Good luck and dont forget either you or your mum let me know if you win
nooroa poa said...
Good Story line Bro hope it goes well for you. all the best
Daniel said...
Keep up the good word bro. and by the way. He's got my vote!!!!!
Greg Bell said...
Hey man, voted for all of them. It would be cool if they could all get made. Now that I have read the scripts I want to see them all.
Adrian Philip McGaw said...
Absolute hilarity!! If made could be NZ's best short ever!! No Lies cuz! "Yeah, true. That’s what my Mum always says. You wanna do some bombs? amazing line.
Tim McLachlan said...
Jonny Adams! Holy cow!!! I've been trying to get hold of you for years, bro! :) Are you on facebook? I wasn't able to track you down there. What's your email bro??? We need to catch up!
Jonathan Adams said...
You got my vote!!!
"Reverse Back Flip Jonny"
Annemarie said...
Great idea!!!
Peter Tonks said...
very cool
David Whittet said...
This is a great concept, beautifully executed and love the pitch. Best of luck, hope it gets made!
David
http://nzt.strutta.com/entries/10655
Tim McLachlan said...
Cheers bro! Pity both my videos came out all squashed up! Not sure what happened there! They were in widecreen on my computer :(
fred neuen said...
Great one! :-))
Rajneel Singh said...
Freakin' LOVE it bro! Love your dialogue, it's fantastic!!